|The events of today| |chapter one|

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                                                                                |chapter one|

 

 

Dear diary

This morning I shivered as I remembered that the test was today and I hadn't studied! 'Oh why didn't mum confiscate my phone!' I thought.Charlie was already eating breakfast when I came down 'hello, Miss.OhWhyDidntMumConfiscateMyPhone!'He said then mimicked my voice 'oh please mum don't confiscate it please I swear I will do my homework first!' I was to busy to retaliate  because I was thinking of an excuse for my parents when they asked why I didn't get good grades 'hmm maybe, I was so worried that I forgot to lock the door of my brain's room and he went out?'I wondered.Suddenly there was a load bang! I was so surprised that I screamed then mum called down 'Sasha don't scream, I now look at what you've done Molly has just started crying!' 'Oops, sorry mum!'

Answer 1

Other people thought this was bad, but I liked it. Don't listen to the haters because your chapter was very interesting and descriptive.

Answer 2

It's good but you could improve on puctutation and quostations. I can't really understand what character is saying what. But it's really good.

Comments

yea! and remember to space words apart

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that is rude

Answer 3

i can barely understand this

Comments

that is really rude