Stan & Terry Part 3

Question

Stan came back with ants inside his blue baseball cap which he was holding. "Are you going to prank Robert by putting ants in his lunch?," said Jerry. "Yes.," said Stan.

At lunch the next day, Stan secretly poured ants from his cap into Robert's chicken soup. As Jerry was peeling his banana, Robert looked into his soup. "What? Who did this!," said Robert. "I did because you pranked me.," said Stan. "I told you that you did not need to do this!," said Jerry. "That was last night.," said Stan. The lunch monitor blew his white whistle. "Detention for Stan!," said The lunch monitor. Stan became sad. "Don't worry brother.," said Jerry.

Answer 1

Great! But I think you could maybe change the speaker tags and just claim 'said is dead.' You could find synonyms depending on the topic, such as exclaimed, replied, murmured, etc. This helps the story be more interesting and helps bring out a character's personality out more.