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Chapter 1 the scary morning!

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 The cloulds were blue no one was there soon lily heard a crack "cccccack".She went to see what was makeing the noise then jack heard a scream"AHHH"."Lily is that you"said Jack,Mike,Bella,Pip,Andy said it all together.Were comeing to get you "Don't come in"Lily said.Were a team were not leaveing without you.So the went in the door they fell in the portoll."Ahh!"Then they saw lily had no eyes!"Ahh"




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?! I did not get this. Please use more spaces and details as well as useing quotes a little better and try checking through your writing for grammer mistakes or get someone near you to read it and give feedback on the story and grammer mistakes. Other than that this was a very good story and i would like to hear more.
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*laughs* IDK wat just happened just wanted to comment on this *laughs*
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WoW.



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