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I have....... decided to write a story ! Now im no jk rowling but i just wanted to write this down somewhere so here it is ! in_love


( cant think of a name lol ) chapter 1

Aneesa sat perched in the tree serveying the area. A pack of knives were strapped to her belt and her sword lay in its scabbard, 

As it had done for the last what, 3 hours ? Aneesa's legs were numb and she was tired. She was about to jumb down from the branch she was precariously dangling on, when she heard it, the distant clopping of hooves. 

She slowly took a knife from her belt, a cruel metal one with a curved blade- her favorite- And perpared to throw. The horses drew closer, Aneesa could now see the two horses wounded and malnourished, one black one brown, pulling a hefty wagon filled with sacks of flour, perfect. 

A middle aged man with a long curved nose sat perched on the lid of the wagon whipping the horses to get a move on. The brown horse reared up and neighed, the rope connecting his bridle to the wagon straining. 

The man cursed and looked around wildy almost like a mouse being hunted. Perhaps he had heard of the terrible spirits who supposedly stalked the area, or even the merciless Aneesa Blamania and her knives sharper, than the most fearsome swords with her- TWANG Aneesa came crashing back to reality to see an arrow pinning the mans whip to a tree. 

In seconds Aneesa had thrown her knife, severing the rope that connected the horses to the wagon. They bolted screeching. Aneesa jumped down exactly at the same time as Olma, her companion. Aneesa left Olma to retrieve her arrow and take out the man, while she stalked the horses. 

The black one had collapsed, its eyes bulging with red sores all down its side. She put it out of its misery with a knife to the neck. Aneesa understood why Olma hated this job but it had to be done. 

Once Olma tried to keep one of the horses they pounced upon, she named it Skylight, but one especialy cold winter, they had ran out of food a while back and Aneesa knew what had to be done. 

She told Olma that Skylight had gone to a beautiful meadow that was covered with daisys and buttercups, Olma cried but got over it. After all it was hard to feel sad on a full stomach. Aneesa stalked the brown horse through miles of forest, ducking low hanging branches and running as silent as the wind. But soon she came to a stop. 

The horse had made it all the way back to the city, Aneesa daren't go any further. She was a wanted criminal inside those walls and anyhow, that horse would be looked after properly now. She made her way back to where Olma stood clutching around a dozen bags of flour, the man and the cart were gone. Only when Aneesa drew closer she saw Olmas precious bow laying on the ground snapped......


So uhm thats it !

If you liked that let me know if there isnt much interest




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I LOVE IT                                                                                   IT SOUNDS SO PROFESSIONAL GIRLIE YOU ARE THE NEW JK ROWLINGomgomg

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wait

y o u   r e a d   h a r r y   p o t t e r ?

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The descriptions of killing the horse and ones before it kind of remind me of the first ~10 seconds of Yellowstone. For those of you who haven't watched it, it begins with a hand slowly raising toward a horse's head. The hand belongs to Kevin Costner who a few seconds later uses his other hand to slowly put a pistol to the horse and fire.

Come to think of it, it's kind of an ironic intro to a show that's about a ranch where the horses are always talked about.
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Ive never watched yellowstone but nice !
by (491k points)
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WHY WOULD HE DO THAT TO THE HORSE?!

I KNOW I SHOULDN'T BE OFFENDED BY THAT

BUT LIKE

 COME ON!
by (126k points)
It was complicated. We're talking about a show where his son (and some of the main character's brother) dies in the first or second episode when they were fighting over some cows.
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I realy like this story

A lot of the storys on here arent very descriptive and unoriginal but i reqly like yours its very good thumbs_up

Liah-maya (he/they)

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Lol i forgot to finish the end bit  ;

If you liked that let me know, if there isnt much interest ... idk THERE BETTER BE !

LOVE YE :D
by (491k points)
Well thank you

I was a little confused by the intro XD
by (491k points)
*outro
+1 vote
by (491k points)
Everything about this is a yes.

I usually have to skip through the descriptive part of good stories because my mind is all over the place, so this one is a hit :D

Bravo!

-Nobi
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Omg ty !!

Im like the same as you ! too much boring paragraphs and im lost lol

Quick question is it a bit too bloody for kidz talk tho ? I was just re-reading it and i realised this might be TOO detailed will i tone it down if i do future parts ?
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Sure, you could tone the description down just a tad bit.

But in terms of description, this is the greatest story since the color of Number D—
by (9.9k points)
ill do a part 2 soon :D



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