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What I saw really confused me.A lot

Was Indi,my best friend,sitting with Mackenzie urban?

The person who bullied me every day?

My heart sank,as I saw them laughing and whispering to each other,but I felt a spark of hope as I saw them walking toward me."hey JJ! Kenzie and I wanted to sit with you,but it was all Mackenzie's idea! She's so nice,isn't she?

My anger burned inside me.I was holding back the tears.Indi knew that "Kenzie" bullied me because of my mom,how me and my dad live in a trailer,how I always stayed away from the crowd.  

   " Oh by the way, I saw Tyler D put a note in your  locker at second period " snickered Indi.i didn't believe her.but what if Tyler did put a note in my locker?

 "  Speaking about lockers,I got to go get my money , I forgot to pay for chocolate milk last week." I said.

Of course this was a lie,but I did forget to pay last week.I just didn't want to seem so excited about getting a note from Tyler.....

I had this weird feeling someone was watching me though,as I was trying not to run in the halls.



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I love it! I like how you made it longer, and good including inner thoughts!!
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