Good, but you should lengthen it. Make it more drawn-out and meaningful, without that much description. Here's a rewritten version I did as an example (dialogue and action-packed):
"'And it's finished!" I exclaimed, leaping out of my chair. I had recently finished my latest map, of the unknown area I liked to call (name here). I couldn't wait to show it to Nia, my friend, who appreciated my maps and liked my imagination.
That memory seemed a lifetime ago, when I was a nerdy, whimsical girl with an eye for math and the stars. I had a normal life, friends, and a crush, and I liked baking and making maps, as you've seen. But that all stopped, the day I received a curse from an unknown entity, one that rendered me without voice.
My mother noticed, she took me to a doctor who said I just had a cold and needed medicine. They didn't know the secret behind my lost voice, and frankly neither did I. Weeks and weeks passed, mostly involving my mother getting enraged by my lack of "thank yous" at dinnertime... before long, striving to teach me a lesson, she sent me to Nia's house. I ran so fast to the forest that the memory is a blur, and the blood, warm blood, rushed to my head as tears streaked my face.
What was going on?"
Of course, just a suggestion, you keep going however you like. I like the concept.
