I am wrighting a book called skys secrit and this is what i have

Question

SKY'S SECRET

Sky

I could not believe they had found me I had been so careful how had they found me what will they do will they come back I was so involved in these thoughts did I did not hear heavy boots on the stairs slowly walking towards me until I felt a rough on on my shoulders and a deep male voice saying on you will regret ever opening that door then he slid his hand into his pocket and fingered at something and suddenly I felt a sharp pain ran through my neck to my heart I crumpled to the ground another bolt ran through me and it all went  black faintly I herd a scream glass breaking a yell and then silence then I felt a warm sticky substance cover my hands .BLOOD.

Sophie

Me and my friends stood in shock at what had just happened sky was it really our best friend who last we had seen of her we were tied up to the gravestones when she had came running out of the forest behind her a figer appeared then she had crumpled to the ground with a knife sticking out of her back and had been draged away we had thought she had died

 We truged back home in silence still trying to comprehend how was she alive

Answer 1

How old r u? Ur spelling is uhhh.... sorry if that sounded rude, also LUV ur story! The only reason I type like this is because I luv using abbreviations

Comments

I, on the other hand, am not a big fan of abbreviations. I do like the abbreviation “lol” though and sometimes use it.

Answer 2

It sounds pretty good, though I highly reccomend adding punctuation to make it more readable. No offense here, but its a bit difficult to read one huge sentence like that. Great work though!!