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Chapter Four

After the chilling visit after fainting a few days ago, and the horrid birthday party of her cousin Grace, she was finally happy she could get some rest. Plus, here friend was coming. She was in bed, thinking. All she thought about was a site she visited a few years back. When she was really young. She could smell the dinner her mother was cooking down stairs. It smelled like rice and beans with a sweet side. She couldn't reconize the sweet smell, but she knew it was something she liked. After smelling the savoring meal, she thought back to the site she went to. It looked like no one wss there. Plus, who would even stay there? It looked like it wasn't for families, or even people that are alone. But, if you were desperate she could see why. She knew the exact location- it's not like she ever forgot. For some reason, she wanted to go back. She was rich, or at least middle class, and wanted to go there? But, theres one reason. For some strange logic, it reminded her of her childhood. Maybe because she went there when she was a child. But she went many places when she was a child, why there? She soon drifted from the thought why. She was determined tomorrow she would go to the place. Though, she couldn't tell her mother. She was just going to have to go on her bike. Its not too far, right? That didn't matter. She was determined. "By tomorrow" she said to herself, determine (as said multiple times). "Time for dinner!" Her mother yelled. She sighed, running down the stairs. Looking at the dinner table, the sweet smell turned out to be pie, apple pie. She then ate plenty.

After dinner, she headed upstairs to her room. It wasn't late, no not at all. But, she was inpatient. She really wanted tomorrow to come. To see the strange place again, what a wonder. She closed her eyes, thinking of the place. She remembered every detail. Down to the walls made of pink brick, and rose flowers crawling up every place of the site. She couldn't really see why people didn't like the place. Plus, it wasn't that bad. Or, at least that's what she thought. She was blinded by the beauty to notice something most people notice. The place strangely looks Victorian, which was a another reason she favored the place.

She finally got some sleep, as she fell to a deep sleep. Dreaming peacefully a out the place.

The next morning...

She woke up, and it wss nearly night. She looked around her room. She thought of how she had to go now, before her mother wakes up. She got dressed in blue jeans and a sweat shirt.

She crept out the front door, every move in the house silent. Once she was outside, she sighed in relief. She got her bike and road as quick as she could to the site.

Once she was there, she ran over to the rosy walls. As usual, the rides were lone. No cars ever passed by, which was always good. She opened the white doors leading into the "garden", if you could even call it that. Once she was inside, the enchanting smell of roses brided her in.

She played on the graden alone for hours till end until she spotted something glowing. It was covered by leaves. She swished the leaves out of the way to reveal a blue glowing object. She stared at it for awhile until she decided to pick it up.

Boom...

It felt like her body was shacking, and colors flew from one side of the world to another.

After she was done flying around, she fell on a pile of straw. Beatrice felt faint. She looked up to see a man with a suit of armour. Beatrice couldn't tell the details of the man, but she heard him say "Are you fine, mam?" That was the last thing she heard before she completely fainted.

. . .

 

Hi! So, here's another chapter! There's a plot twist and is very confusing so let me just tell you what's going on. Beatrice touches a random thing she found in the dirt (dont tell me why she did that), and gets trapped in this alternate Universe. Please comment on this chapter. That makes me motivated. You can also ask what you want to happen in the other chapters. I will take your ideas with consideration. Thanks again for reading!



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i think she should wake up in a castle infermary. and the guy in the suit of aumor should be the guy from her dream from the first chapter. that way it could tie in with the story line.omgomg and also read my story trailer titled rise of the wolves and enter my story contest titled hey i am starting a story contest

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Cool! I might do that in my next chapter!
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glad to helpbow




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