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Chapter 2


May 19th, 2002, Present Day

Clink clink, the forks in the cafeteria hall went as its occupants ate fine foods. It was 9:46 AM in Seattle, Washington, and the children who were to board the nearing train were having a banquet before they head off to one of the most prestigious camps. These children were heirs of wealthy families—the most well known, for that. Ranging from ages 11-14, these children were to harness their economically favoring abilities. This brought to fact that many of these prosperous families had more than a few offspring—that seemed to be the only way something as exceptional as this may be packed.

Those were the thoughts that raced through Nicolas Everpane's head as he seated himself at the loneliest booth. It shouldn't be any surprise that this station had booths; luxurious ones. He ran his fingers along the Burgundy leather seat that was trimmed with fine gold, admiring its heavenly feel. He hoped no one would ruin this tranquil moment he was having on his own...

"Hello!"

Of course, nothing lasts forever, he thought as he steered his eyes upward to meet the one who made that dreaded greeting.

It was another boy, with beautiful, mahogany hair that was quite messy. His eyes were a piercing blue that probably caught many off guard, not to mention the biggest smile Nicolas had ever seen. The boy stuck his hand out to shake, not breaking his glacial blue stare.

"I'm Zachary, Zachary Abbycat. I'm from the Abbycat Family... As you could probably tell by my last name, haha," he said with a nervous laugh. Nicolas didn't find this interruption as amusing, and he didn't attempt to crack a smile. Zachary gulped. "What's your name?"

The train, which seemed to have appeared out of thin air, screeched its air into all ears. 

"I'll tell you later.


End of Chapter


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Apologies for the short chapter, I was a little rushed and had to finish fast. The next chapter will be more full.

Thank you for reading,

-Nobi




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CLIFFHANGER! Sort of. Luv it anyways!
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I love it when I leave people on cliffhangers and then they get mad for not having more x3

That means that I've done well :D
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Sometimes I find cliffhangers so annoyingly good I literally can’t sleep. Which is also annoying lol.

 You HAVE done well. Drenched in awesomenessly well :D
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I'VE MADE IT :D
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YES! omgomg

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Just realized that this chapter and the later chapters are set in completely different months when they were intended to be on the same day, but because I can't go back and edit this, I want you all to know that the month has been November.

Thank you for reading :]

-Nobi
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+1
:]
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Im confused is Nicolas Everpane now 220 years old? Judging by the fact chapter one takes place in 1801, and Nicolas is mentioned to be 19 years old, he would be born in 1782. 2002 minus 1782 is 220, and that would be his age if he was talking at the party, unless Everpane invented a way to time travel.
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No, that was Sebastian, another Everpane.

Since Sebastian isn't immortal, he's dead now x3

This is Nicolas Everpane, the 11 year old heir of one of the richest families in America.
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Okay, thanks for the confirmation nobi.
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Cool! These shorter chapters are a lot nore digestible.

But this is quite a contrast from chapter 1!
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Thank you! Do you think the contrast is good?

 I don't like really short chapters; I feel like I'm being robbed if something great, especially when it's a story that I'm attached to on here x3
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Oh, I liked them, and the contrast is very interesting. Kinda like the story from the first book of Sherlock Holmes, but the backstory came after the book.
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wow

soooo gooood.



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