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Winner of the optional contest for my story scared is.......magicalharrypottergal's best answer post.

 

Magicalharrypotter, do you mind me changeing your post a little? You wrote:

'Grace... Where is she? Muttered Caroline Bunihoffer 

 "She's probably at home, Fighting with her brother adam." Replied one of the men 

Grace checked the id card...

GRACE BUNIHOFFER? Grace was frozen with shock But then she heard the guns...

I will change the grammar and add and change stuff to:

"Grace... Where is she?" mumbled Caroline Bunihoffer with a whole lot of pain.

Grace checked the id card. She could not see a."Grace" anywhere. Then, she checked the other side of the ID card. Under dead, she saw Grace Bunnihoffer-14 years old, Car hit bike when she was on it. Adam Bunnihoffer- 11 years old, Car hit bike when he was on it.

 Grace Bunnihoffer? Adam Bunnihoffer? Still shocked, Grace peered out of vines. She was almost walking through the trees, but the she smelled the Ghost-Gun powder......




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